An Embarrassing Experience( draft-1 )
I had an embarrassing experience when I was 9 years old. That
mornig I got up at 7 a.m. I was already too late to go to school
on time and my home was far from school; therefor, my mom
asked me to change my sleeping suit into uniform in her car.
However I was so stupid that I found myself wearing a skirt, but
that day I have a PE class and I should wear a trousers. In my
classroom, everybody laughed at me; at the meantime,I felt I
was a dumbnuts. Since that day, I always look at mirror if do
I wear the right clothes before I go out my home because I don't
want this happens again in the future.
posted by Samantha＊霓∥ @ 6:19 PM
7 Comments:
1.therefore 少了一個e
2.我覺得if的後面不用加do
3.but that day I "had" a PE class ... 那個had打成have了
by the way，其實我也有相同的經驗，但我沒有睡過頭，所以我以粉快的速度飆我的鐵馬回家換。就是這樣。
Thatmornig I got up at 7 a.m.,and I was already...
句子不要那麼長結構複雜不一定好
and 前面記得加逗號
therefor? therefore
However式副詞是不是應加個逗號
but that day I have a PE
but that day I had a PE
if do I wear the right clothes
do I wear the right clothes
if I wear the right clothes
I go out my home
my home 可不用寫
小心別再睡過頭了,不過好險我們只需拿運動服去學校換,但是還是要記得帶啦
1.Thatmornig 要分開喔
2.therefor拼錯了
3.if do I wear the right clothes不需加do
(第二行第一個字)morning少一個n
I was already....(already是不是只能搭配現在完成式呀?)
therefore 少一個e
if do I wear the right...
(do加在I前面怪怪ㄉ)
therefor=>therefore
I was already too late to go to school on time....要加already嗎?
if do I wear the right clothes..要加do嗎?
therefor我看了很久...就覺得好像哪裡怪怪^^"原來少個e阿..
應該不用在家already了吧?
第7行的have應該是要用過去式吼?!
倒數第4行的Iwas忘了控格喔
I had an embarrassing experience when I was 9 years old. Thatmornig 這邊分開一下I got up at 7 a.m. I was already 本人覺得可以不用啦，要不然就放後面 too late to go to school on time and my home was 這樣用過去式好像搬家一樣，你自己決定吧 far from school; therefor, my mom asked me to change my sleeping suit into uniform 為什麼穿制服大家還穿不一樣，其他人穿褲子，你了我的點的 in her car. However I was so stupid that I found myself wearing a skirt, but that day I have 過去式 a PE class and I should wear a trousers 怪怪的說. In my classroom, everybody laughed at me; at the meantime,I felt Iwas 分開一下 a dumbnuts. Since that day, I always look at mirror if do I 為什麼要倒裝？ wear the right clothes before I go out my home 之類的because I don'twant this happens again in the future
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