Tips for Staying Healthy -draft1
With the standard of living moving up, staying health become a important topic to our life. Firstly, we should drink at least eight glasses of water a day, because the more water you drink the better your physical circulation will be. Additionally, go to bed before 11 p.m. It is good for our health and makes you feel energetic if you have enough sleep. Besides, taking exercise every week and walk by your feet instead of taking a elevator, because regularly exercise can control our weight and stature. Finally, we should always look the thing’s bright side and keep smiling on our face.
As a saying goes, being cheerful keeps you healthy; it is slow death to be bloomy all the time. Undoubtedly, if you can follow above-mentioned, you will be healthier than before.

6 Comments:
1.Additionally, go to bed before 本人覺得可以going之類的
2.because regularly exercise can control 本人覺得regular要不然是副詞
3.look the thing’s bright side 應該是look on the bright side
1.Additionally, go to bed before 11 p.m. go要加ing
2.being cheerful keeps you healthy
應該是you are healthy
1.become "an" important topic to our life
staying health "become"->becomes
, because->because前面不用加逗號ㄛ
regularly exercise->regular exercise才對
on our "face"->faces
because前面不用加逗號!!
結論不錯!!
Firstly為什麼不能直接用First?
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