A Big Mistake-draft1
Tom is a college student. His father received Tom’s report card and found that he failed in the exam. Therefore, his father was very angry and asked why he got no more than 59 score. At first, he didn’t understand the reason that he fail in the exam; however, he recalled that he played a practical joke on his math teacher last class. He was guess that it may be the reason. Because Tom he is interested in math very much and he have never got so low score. After his father knew the reason, he went purple with rage. Then his father punished him can’t play computer and hasn’t allowance for a month.
posted by Samantha＊霓∥ @ 10:22 PM
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Because Tom he is interested in math very much and he have never got so low score.
有兩個主詞 and 不用了用逗號代替即可
Then his father punished him can’t play computer and hasn’t allowance for a month.
我會用
In order to punished him, Tom's father ....
Because Tom he is interested in math very much 可以不用加he
His father should punish him!!
白目小 哈哈哈
好啦 沒什麼錯誤 有也被講完了=.=
我覺得可以把他對老師的"joke"寫出來
敘述一下"joke"的內容
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1.why he got no more than 59 score.
覺得怪怪的，雖然中文下去想可以啦，應該是why he did't get more than 59 score.
2.At first, he didn’t understand the reason that he fail in the exam
應該是failed
3.He was guess that it may be the reason用guessed 就好了
4.Then his father punished him can’t play computer and hasn’t allowance for a month.
我覺得and didn't give him allowance
1..he went purple with rage->his face turned purple with rage.
2..play computer ->要加冠詞唄!!
1.why he got no more than 59 score
咡起來有點怪，可是又不知道要改哪裡
2.He "was" guess 不用加was
Because "Tom he" is interested in math very much....不是只要一個嗎？
score->可數名詞+s
"fail" in the exam-failed
Then his father punished him...我會寫Then his father punished him for his faults and disapproved of playing computer games.
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