Samantha 甄霓

Thursday, April 12, 2007

autobiography-draft1 (part1)

My name is Shang chen ni, I’m study in National Tainan Commercial Vocational school. I lived with my grandparent but my father’s house is near by my grandparent’s house. My grandmother has mysophobia. Therefore she always makes out our house exactly clean. Because of her devoting to family, I can feel comfortable each time I come home. My grandfather is the idol to me since I knew he had been American for studying. It’s pretty amazing for a kid that has never been to aboard. Now and then I remind myself that I should make more effort than my grandfather, then he will proud of me. My father is so generous in buying books for me because in his opinion have a great quantity of reading is an essential thing. That’s the reason that I can buy four or five books at a time when I go to a bookstore. Though my mother doesn’t live with me, she still deeply affected me with my habits. She majored in art , so she taught me drawing since I were a child. I continue to blossom with my warm and fragrant family.

I like listening music when I studying because it can make me to be calm after a busy day of school. Occasionally, I express my felling by drawing. Besides, I also read various books such as comic books and fashion magazines. The story of the comic book is always funny and interesting so it can make me relax and the magazines enrich my sense of beauty. On the other hand, some literatures of history attract me, too. The former help me relieve my pressure and the latter make my life become more colorful.

9 Comments:

Blogger FawnYma said...

1.I "live" with my grandparent
2.because in his opinion "that" "having" a great quantity of reading is an essential thing.
3.so she "has" taught me "how to draw " since I "was" a child.
4.I like "to" listening music when I "study" because it can make me "be" calm
5.I express my "feeling"
6.Besides, I also read various books 我想besides 和also 取一個就好了

6:56 AM  
Blogger 許雅婷 said...

1.I’m study in 是I study in
2.she taught me drawing since I were a child.是I was a child
3.I like listening music when I studying應該是I study

7:21 AM  
Blogger Celia said...

"I’m study in National Tainan Commercial Vocational school."
應該是 I study in National Tainan Commercial Vocational school.

"She majored in art , so she taught me drawing since I were a child. " 是 I was a child.

9:56 PM  
Blogger 梁宜靜 said...

1.. I lived with ~用現在式就可以了吧!!
2..but前面要加逗號
3.. I knew he had been"to" American for studying
4..she taught me drawing since I were a child->是不是要加has呢?
5..listening"to" music

7:30 AM  
Blogger Ryuka(暐) said...

she taught me drawing since I "were" a child
應該是she taught me drawing since I "was" a child
I lived with my grandparent but my father’s house is near by my grandparent’s house.
中間的but要有,

6:50 PM  
Blogger Butterfly said...

1.My name is Shang chen ni要倒過來,甄霓商

2.I lived with my grandparent but my father’s house is near by my grandparent’s house. 那個live用現在式就,而且這樣寫好亂不知道你到底住哪,要不然就乾脆不要寫了

3.Therefore she always makes out our house exactly clean兩個therefore後面要逗點

4.My grandfather is the idol to me since I knew he had been American for studying.我覺得那個the 用 a 就好了,而且整個句子我總是覺得怪怪的

5. I should make more effort than my grandfather, then he will proud of me.我覺得用make effort more than my grandfather 比較順,後且應該是will be proud of me

6.because in his opinion have a great quantity of reading is an essential thing.那個in his opinion後面要逗點,然後having

7.so she taught me drawing since I were a child.用完成式

8. I continue to blossom with my warm and fragrant family.
我覺得可以寫I continuously blossom with my warm and gragrant family.

9
I like listening music when I studying because it can make me to be calm after a busy day of school.那個是I'm studying而且because是連接詞前面有逗點比較好

而且我先聲明我是因為把原本複製過來comment才會那個長的

3:18 AM  
Blogger Tina said...

I’m "studying" in National...
I "live" with my...
so she "has" taught me "how to draw"..
I like listening "to" music when I "study"..

5:38 AM  
Blogger 傻咩 said...

listening music加個to
嗯嗯!!你真的很有sense of beauty
since I "were" a child

5:57 AM  
Blogger Estella said...

哇靠 你們這組是怎樣
回應都超熱烈的...

我們的都冷冷清清..
看到那麼長的回應
我想..

我想講的都被講完了吧-.-

6:03 AM  

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