The computer-draft1
Computers now play an important role in our life. For example, people use them to sell various products. It’s why Internet shopping stores become more and more popular. They can also deal a great of information by date software. People also use the simple computer to control the washing machines and air conditioners even to sweep the floor with robot. Third, without the equation of time, business’s meeting can take place in different country. Through the computer net work, we can get information from all over the world and make our life be more convenient.
Personally, I have a liking for computers. First, I always use them to research all information of my subjects and hand in my schoolwork in time. Besides, I can download music or movies for my entertainment in order to lead my life become more colorful. Instead of reading a piece of newspaper, I can read newspaper on the Internet. Because of computers, we handle diverse information without limitation of space or time. In conclusion, a computer has become a good companion we can’t do without.

8 Comments:
in different country.應該要複數
we can get information from all over the world and make our life be more convenient.
不用be吧
這樣會有兩個動詞
既然前面電腦都用複數那最後一個也用複數
第一段出現的third怪怪的!!
前面沒有ㄧ和二阿??
那為什麼後面會有三呢??
simple computer"s"
with robot"s"
different "countries"
突然蹦出一個third,怪怪的
our life ->複數吧
我找不出來了..
1. a great amount of 感覺比較順
2.third 怪怪的
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